Posts Tagged ‘Oh My Heart’

Rate My Poem 1-10 ?

Friday, June 26th, 2009
hey. asked:


*We had to make a poem based on our mystery novel.
Please let me know if it’s good if it needs some changes.
Be as harsh as you’d like.

What is Lisa’s secret this secret i must know
Wheres the path to truth where it leads me i shall go

So eagerly exited to put the pieces all in place
Yet so malignantly mortified by the sight of her frightning face

With too many questions, and so little time
Theres too many possibilities to fit this crazy crucial crime

Oh my heart beats so quickly as my adrenaline rushes.
Like a cute charming crush producing a billion beautiful blushes

So desprete i’ve become my patients faden away
I try to think thoughtfuly and carefuly each day by day

But nothing seems to work and more impatient i proceed
Will i overcome this mind bottling mytery? To find this out begin to read
I’m only in the 7th grade.. and i tried lol
Thanks!

But now i need a tittle! ]=

Charlie